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Life is a battle, a war to be won,
Life is a battle, a war to be won,
And yet it is frivolous, joyful and fun,
And yet it is frivolous, joyful and fun,
Life is a battle and yet it is fun,
A frivolous, joyful war to be won.

Love is a gamble, a risk that you take,
Love is a gamble, a risk that you take,
It's also a life choice that each of us make,
It's also a life choice that each of us make,
A choice, a gamble, a risk that you take,
Love is a life that each of us make.

Pain is a constant that all of us feel,
Pain is a constant that all of us feel,
It brings us a depth, making us real,
It brings us a depth, making us real,
Pain is a depth that all of us feel,
It brings us a constant, making us real.

A frivolous gamble, a risk that you take,
Love is a depth, a choice that you make,
Pain brings a constant, making us real,
Life is a war that each of us feel,
And yet it is frivolous, joyful and fun,
It is also a battle that is to be won.
This is called a paradelle. It is feral and gross. It is pain, and yet I feel an achievement completing one again. Yeuck. Links explaining are below.

The paradelle is (in Collins' own note) "one of the more demanding French fixed forms, first appearing in the langue d'oc love poetry of the eleventh century. It is a poem of four six-line stanzas in which the first and second lines, as well as the third and fourth lines of the first three stanzas, must be identical. The fifth and sixth lines, which traditionally resolve these stanzas, must use all the words from the preceding lines and only those words. Similarly, the final stanza must use every word from all the preceding stanzas and only those words." - from first website.

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A
A
B
B
Jumble of AB
Jumble of AB

C
C
D
D
Jumble of CD
Jumble of CD

E
E
F
F
Jumble of EF
Jumble of EF

Combine
All the words
Of all the other 3 stanzas
Together to
Make this last
Stanza

-Love you all,

Sammy
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caybeach Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Hi, this piece was featured here: [link] :heart:
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caybeach Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow this is amazing Sammy! :D
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kiwi-damnation Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009   Writer
Wow thanks hon!
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caybeach Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
It's my pleasure :aww:
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EnkaOwakura Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2009
Definitively a form worth trying, very challenging. This is just one of the many reasons that make me admire you.
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kiwi-damnation Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2009   Writer
Awww! :heart: Awwww... :blush: Thanks hon, it will be in DFC :)
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IsabellaMichel Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2009  Student Writer
:) I've always had such respect for you, trying out all these forms of poetry. I think it was you, who first inspired me to jump out of the box myself. :heart:
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kiwi-damnation Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009   Writer
WOW.. :wow: That's a massive compliment :) I guess I am one of those people who doesn't leave well enough alone, and likes to try and challenge myself constantly :) I'm glad I helped you find some more of your own talent.
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IsabellaMichel Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2009  Student Writer
Challenging yourself is awesome. I'm constantly in need of
a new challenge. Just sticking to an original "style" gives
you writers block, I find. jumping around keeps you on your
toes. :D
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kiwi-damnation Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2009   Writer
I might have to issue you a challenge then my friend :D
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IsabellaMichel Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2009  Student Writer
oooooh. :D I shall keep an eye out for it. ^^
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kiwi-damnation Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2009   Writer
It starts December chicky :)
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IsabellaMichel Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2009  Student Writer
kay. :D
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JewelsD Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2009
Wow...I've never seen that form before. You've mastered it! I...will not attempt it.
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kiwi-damnation Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2009   Writer
I hadn't either until a friend of mine (=XburiedinblackX) did one and I was like 'Must try'. Not an easy one at all. And thanks hon!
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2009  Professional Writer
Does look hard and intimidating... :nod:
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kiwi-damnation Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2009   Writer
I reckon you could pull it off :)
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krag-the-devil Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2009   Writer
curious form + fine execution = good.
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kiwi-damnation Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2009   Writer
Thanks :)
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Renegade-Angel23 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2009
well done! Not only is the poem fantastic but you have done the form expertly again.
Congrats sister of mine. :hug: :glomp:
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kiwi-damnation Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2009   Writer
Awww thanks hon! :glomp:
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Renegade-Angel23 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2009
My pleasure :D
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Drool-in-terror Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2009
Yeeesh that's intense...
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kiwi-damnation Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2009   Writer
Thanks :D
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