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DFC 2016: 3. Brutal Birth

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Steamy breeze blows through trees
Sunlight scalds the waking earth
Storm-clouds glowing green like moss
Waves crash violently in firth
Sands whipped, spinning - blinding eyes
Crackling greeting souls with mirth
Thunderous calls rain, hail – assail!
All witness monsoon’s brutal birth
DFC 2016 Day 3: The Wulü Lüshi 

The Lüshi is a Chinese regulated form. It has eight lines and specific word restrictions. There are two common types of lüshi which dictate how many characters/words are in each line: the wulü lüshi (five characters), and the qilü lüshi (seven characters). There is also a six character lüshi form which is rarely used. Characters in this context refer to number of words rather than syllables.   All lüshi forms monorhyme on the even lines (abcbdbeb).

 The first couplet sets up the piece, middle two develops it, and final couplet concludes. Middle two should have some mirrored elements/words in them. Caesuras (pauses) are used to separate different phrases.

 
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DFC 2016 is here!
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DFC (The December Form Challenge) 2016
Hi everyone, I hope you're all doing well. I can hardly believe that it's this time of year again, it feels like yesterday was May and I was looking at the rest of the year with wonder and promise. There are now only a few weeks left of 2016, most of them will be crazy with family gatherings and holiday preparations. I hope that you can also join me for DFC as it is here again, and promises to be better than ever.
Before I get too excited, I am sure there are some n00bs to DFC this year who will grace this page. For them, I present you with a brief History and explanation of DFC....
History of DFC (The December Form Challenge)
DFC (December Form Challenge) was created in 2008 as a way for me (kiwi-damnation) to get out of a literary rut. I was writing the same things with slightly different words and it had me feeling crappy. So i
  & DFC 2016 Form Chart by kiwi-damnation
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Storm season here in Australia, especially Queensland where we have violent summer storms. Heat, electricity, water and wind beget a powerful combination.

Love you guys,

Sammy
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cholie's avatar
I love the rhythmic quality of this poem. The images are profound, they resound and resonate with me deeply.